Archery~required for archers

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe stood outside in a large feild in back of the Temple of the Heren Istarion. There are three targets set up here, the wide open feild in back of them. There is a rack of bows a little ways over from the targets, and several full quivers on the ground next to the bows. Valanthe runs her fingers over the feathers of an arrow she has in her hand as she waits for her students to arive for their archery class.

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OOC:
- This class will start on Friday if all of the students have not showed up by then.
- Keep all of your posts in character. Put any OOC questions or comments in this format.
- Please try to keep your spelling and grammer at it's best.
- No spam
- I will have an OOC section at the bottom of all my posts for comments and suggestions on each individual post before it.
- This class is for YOUR benifit! Try to learn from what I have to say :)
~I hope you enjoy this class! :)

[Goldberry344]

Golde strolled casually onto the archery field, her favorite bow in one hand, her quiver slung over the other shoulder. She smiled to Valanthe, then glanced around at the supplied bows and quvers. "Am I not allowed to use my own for this class?" she inquired.

[Eöl]

Celebrien jogs onto the archery field with a smile on his face. "Hello, I am a new member here and I can't wait to start this class. I hope we can have fun."

[Phenix]

Phenix walked into the field. he were caring his bow in one hand and had the quivers in his belt. he walked over to Valanthe

" excuse me my lady but is this the archery class?"

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe grins at the students who had arrived.
"Golde, feel free to use your own equipment, these others are here only for those who would rather use them or haven't their own." Now she turns to the others.
"This is indeed archery class! I hope you will all enjoy it! Celebrien, if you haven't brought your own bow and quiver, you may choose one from over there." She guestures to the equipment on the ground.

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Goldberry344- Nice enterance. "Strolled casually", I liked that, it's good that you put in a little description as opposed to a simple action. The only thing I have to say is a spotted a typo. No biggie, just don't forget to proofread carefully before submitting a post.

Celebrien- An ok enterance as well. Very simple, so nothing much to comment on, but simple isn't always a bad thing :)

Phenix- Your enterance itself was ok. However I noticed several spelling, grammer, and mechanics problems. Make sure to proofread before you post. The only thing I have to say about your entrance was you used the verb walk twice one right after the other. I would suggest using a different word in place of one of the walks. Also, I think you may be a bit confused. Quivers are what hold the arrows, they are not the arrows themselves. If you knew this already and I was just confused, I apologize.

Good work so far, everybody!

[Legolaschick]

Legolaschick slowly and unsure of herself wakled in with her favorite bow and "Lucky" arrows the ones that her father had helped her make. Is this were I need to be? She asked shyly.

[Legolaschick]

(opps sorry I mean walked not wakled)

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe nodded with a welcome smile.
"If you are signed up for foot archery, this is indeed where you need to be."
Valanthe picked up her bow and looked at all of her students.
"We shall begin soon. Are there any questions thus far?"

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Legolaschick- First of all, by pressing the edit button at the bottom of your post, you can go back and fix a mistake such as that, but try to catch that sort of thing before posting. Second of all, your entry post is almost identical to the one you made in the mounted archery thread. You should make each post different and original. Don't repeat yourself like that. Other than that, there were a few mistakes in spelling and mechanics.

I CANNOT STRESS ENOUGH THE IMPORTANCE OF PROOFREADING TO ALL OF YOU.

After the entrances, I will start to be more picky about posts. I will start to break them down peice by peice, pointing out the good and the bad. I am sure they will all be fine if you hearken to of my comments. :)

[Goldberry344]

Goldie took her bowstring out of her quiver, and hooked the bottom loop over it's appropriate end, bracing the lower shaft against her instep as she bent the top of her bow to catch the other loop of the string. In a flash she drew her bow back to her ear, stretching her muscles. Relaxing slowly she brought the string to its resting place, not wanting to dry fire and hurt the bow and string. She leaned lightly against her bow and waited for class to start.

OOC:
I checked most of the spelling and such, im sorry if i didnt get it all. I wish the forum had spell check.... :D

[Eöl]

"Just a quick question Valanthe..." Celebrien asked "when does this class start? Are there more people that you know are coming, or do we need a certain number of participants to start?

[ILLOTRTM]

"Well, if there are no more questions at this time, we will begin now."
Valanthe paused for a moment, but no questions arose.
"Alright then, let us begin. For those of you who have some experience with archey, please bear with me, for we will start with the very basics. All of you please take your bows and stand on the line I have marked for you." She gestured towards a line drawn in the dirt a little ways away from the targets. After the students were all in place, Valanthe took up her own bow.
"Let me first see how much you can all do. For those who have not done it, draw a single arrow from your quivers and fit them to your bow."
As everyone follows these instructions, Valanthe fits an arrow as well.
"Now, bring your bow up close to the side of your face. Hold the arrow between your index and middle finger. Pull your bow back so that the heel of your hand is nearly touching the side of your ear. Thus said, let me see you fire an arrow at these targets."

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Celebiren- If you would look at my first post, you will see that I mentioned that this class would start on Friday. :) Other than that..
"Just a quick question Valanthe..." Celebrien asked "when does this class start?

This should have been:

"Just a quick question, Valanthe," Celebrien asked, "when does this class start?

[Goldberry344]

Goldie drew her bow back, aimed for a second and released, her arrow hitting the far right of the bulls eye, boardering on red. Impressed with herself, she lowered her bow.

[Legolaschick]

Legolaschick picked up her bow and pulled her arrows from her quiver and put it on the bow. She drew back just as her father had shown her. She looked to Valanthe for aprovale, and getting it she shot. The arrow hit just outside of the bulls eye. She smiled. That was good. She said to herself and got another arrow ready.

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe grinned.

"Very nice! Good work! Now, how about the rest of you?"

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Goldie- Not to shabby. However, you used a lot of commas in your first sentence.

Goldie drew her bow back, aimed for a second and released, her arrow hitting the far right of the bulls eye, boardering on red.

I would have suggested something like:

Goldie drew her bow back, aimed for a second, and released. Her arrow hit the far right of the bulls eye, boardering on the red.
It's just an easier way of putting it. Other than that, it looked fine to me.

Legolaschick- Legolaschick picked up her bow and pulled her arrows from her quiver and put it on the bow.

Too many and's. You shouldn't put more than one and in a sentence. next time try something like this:
Legolaschick picked up her bow, pulled an arrow from her quiver, and put it on the bow.

That was good. She said to herself and got another arrow ready.
It was worded a little funny, and the dialoge was done incorrectley. This is how it should look:

"That was good,"
She said to herself, getting another arrow ready.

I noticed a few spelling mistakes as well. I think your biggest problem is proofreading. Read each of your posts over before posting them. I promise you, it will make a BIG difference. :)

[Eöl]

Celebrien grabbed a bow and a quiver from the ground, then drew an arrow. "I hope I don't mess this up too bad!" he thought. He drew the arrow back, aimed, then fired. The arrow hit in the white, about six inches from the bullseye. "Oh well," he thought "at least I didn't miss the target completely."

[ILLOTRTM]

"That wasn't too bad, Celebrien," Valanthe said in response to his shot, "There are many others who could not even do that well."

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Goldie- I'm very sorry, I didn't see your post before Celebrien's question until now. :o I liked it very much, though! Nice detail, no mistakes, very nice.

Celebrien- A very nice post. No spelling or grammer mistakes. However, when you put in thoughs, put them in italics. Also when doing a dialoge, start a new paragraph in order to make it easier to read. For example:
Celebrien grabbed a bow and a quiver from the ground, then drew an arrow. "I hope I don't mess this up too bad!" he thought. He drew the arrow back, aimed, then fired. The arrow hit in the white, about six inches from the bullseye. "Oh well," he thought "at least I didn't miss the target completely."

should have been:

Celebrien grabbed a bow and a quiver from the ground, then drew an arrow.
"I hope I don't mess this up too bad!" he thought. He drew the arrow back, aimed, then fired. The arrow hit in the white, about six inches from the bullseye.
"Oh well," he thought "at least I didn't miss the target completely."
I can tell your learning from yours and others' mistakes. You're doing very well :)

[Legolaschick]

Legolaschick pulled back agian, this time just a little to far, but she didn't notice the mistake till she had let go of the string. ."Oops," she said to herself, "I do hope that Valanthe didn't see that." As her arrow just hit the outside of the target.

OOC
I'm trying to be more carful about the spelling and proof reading

[ms Greenleaf]

Hello, I am here not as an archer...I only was wondering if any of the other professions needed archery? For instance the assassin. Oh hello Goldberry, Celebrien.

[Goldberry344]

Goldie drew back her bow, slowly this time, taking time to aim more to the left, and released. Her arrow struck closer to the center, but further down then before.

[Phenix]

Phenix drow back the bowstring to his face and ealised the arrow " damn" he hsouted as the saw the arow miss its target by a few inches,

[lossenandunewen]

Lossenandunewen appeared on the field, her feet making no sound as they slowly stepped on the grass with an elegant, inaudible grace. "I am here for an archery lesson, i hope you will let me stay, as i can see you have already begun" She said, her red hair moving in the wind. She pulled out her ivory bow. "I hope you do not object to personal objects, my lord, for this bow has been with me since i set out from home those many years ago." She smiled. "Should I now try for the bullseye? I've practiced by myself." She pulled back the bowstring, and placing an arrow from her quiver onto the proper places, she released. The entire movement of it seemed utterly graceful, as if it were water in a mould. The arrow struck the target, though slightly below the bullseye. "I missed. Well, i'll await your next instruction. I feel i may fare better with some help from a master archer such as yourself."

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe crossed her arms over her chest and grinned.

"Very nice! Most of you have a lot of experience. Those of you who missed, no big deal! You just need a bit more practice, but it seems as if you all know the basics already, so I will let you each make one last shot, and then we shall move on."
She now turned to Lossenandunewen, a stern look on her face.

"You're late. Not a good start!" Now Valanthe's look turned into a smile. "However, we shall overlook it this time. It was a very nice shot. Please make one more with the rest. Valanthe looked back at the archers who were preparing to shoot again.

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Legolaschick- "Legolaschick pulled back agian, this time just a little to far, but she didn't notice the mistake till she had let go of the string. ."Oops," she said to herself, "I do hope that Valanthe didn't see that." As her arrow just hit the outside of the target.

OOC
I'm trying to be more carful about the spelling and proof reading"
I can see that. :D Very nice, I see an improvement. However, you said "till", I understand what you were doing, but I'd prefer if you used "Until". It looks more... professional. ;) :D I also think you are still having a bit of trouble, for that matter... everyone is. I'll go over it a little more at the end of this post.
CORRECTED:
"Legolaschick pulled back agian, this time just a little too far, but she didn't notice the mistake till she had let go of the string.
"Oops," she said to herself, "I do hope that Valanthe didn't see that," as her arrow just hit the outside of the target.
Over all it was pretty good. Keep it up :D

ms Greenleaf- I'll PM you about that, ok? :)

Goldberry344- Goldie drew back her bow, slowly this time, taking time to aim more to the left, and released. Her arrow struck closer to the center, but further down then before.
Your post was fine. I noticed no spelling/grammer/mechanics mistakes. The only thing I have to say is perhaps you should have seperated that first sentence a little more?It may have looked a little better if you broke it up a bit more. However, there is nothing wrong with the way you did it. Kudos! :D Continue!

Phenix- Phenix drow back the bowstring to his face and ealised the arrow " damn" he hsouted as the saw the arow miss its target by a few inches,
Still a few mistakes in spelling and such, but it isn't s big deal. I understand. Try to work on it, though. :) However, I was a bit upset with the use of foul language in your post. Not only will it look bad when rping, but the mods can and probably would get on your case if they spotted it. Not too bad :)
CORRECTED: Phenix drew back the bowstring to his face and released the arrow. He cussed loudly as the arrow missed its target by a few inches.

lossenandunewen- Lossenandunewen appeared on the field, her feet making no sound as they slowly stepped on the grass with an elegant, inaudible grace. "I am here for an archery lesson, i hope you will let me stay, as i can see you have already begun" She said, her red hair moving in the wind. She pulled out her ivory bow. "I hope you do not object to personal objects, my lord, for this bow has been with me since i set out from home those many years ago." She smiled. "Should I now try for the bullseye? I've practiced by myself." She pulled back the bowstring, and placing an arrow from her quiver onto the proper places, she released. The entire movement of it seemed utterly graceful, as if it were water in a mould. The arrow struck the target, though slightly below the bullseye. "I missed. Well, i'll await your next instruction. I feel i may fare better with some help from a master archer such as yourself."
Very nice! I was very impressed by your post! Good work! There were a few simple mistakes, such as you didn't capitalize "I" all of the time. Also, you called me Lord instead of Lady. No big deal, they are things I'm sure you will fix with ease. You, as everyone else, still have the dialoge a bit off, but I'm going to go over that. As a matter of fact, I'm going to give a breif lesson in using dialoge right now:

When speaking in an RP post, there are several ways people do it. Some people put it in bold, some just put it where it may fall, but I think it's best to seperate it from the rest of your post so it is easier to read. For example:
Cora walked out into the meadow. She watched a bird fly overhead, and called out to it. "Small bird, what say you?" The bird simply kept flying and ignored her.
This is one way you could say it. I will not count it against you if you choose to do it this way in te future. I personally would do it this way:
Cora walked out into the meadow. She watched a bird fly overhead, and called out to it.

"Small bird, what say you?"

The bird simply kept flying and ignored her.

I think it is easier to read this way.
When posting a thought, as in a quote not spoken verbally, you should put it in italics. For example:
Her small feet carried her quietly into the great hall. "I wonder how long it took to build a place like this?" She thought to herself in silence.
This should be:
Her small feet carried her quietly into the great hall.
"I wonder how long it took to build a place like this?" She thought to herself in silence.
Those are the problems most of you are having. If you have any questions at all, PLEASE post them OOC here :) I'm teaching this class to help you. :)

[lossenandunewen]

"I must try this again, my lady. You will notice I am very set in my ways"

Lossenandunewen graciously slid another arrow onto her bowstring. She closed one eye, stuck out her tongue a bit; a look of concentration. She let the arrow fly, and it hit the splintered first arrow.

"Well, I know I can manage that spot atleast"

She said, with a laugh and a smile.

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe chuckled.

"That's alright. No big deal. Next?"

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lossenandunewen- "I must try this again, my lady. You will notice I am very set in my ways"

Lossenandunewen graciously slid another arrow onto her bowstring. She closed one eye, stuck out her tongue a bit; a look of concentration. She let the arrow fly, and it hit the splintered first arrow.

"Well, I know I can manage that spot atleast"

She said, with a laugh and a smile.
Another very nice post! I'm glad to see you've listened to the things I said. :) As always, a few simple corrections should be made, such as "atleast" made "at least" and such.

A note to all of you, if you have trouble with typos and things, I would suggest you copy and paste your post onto another document and use spell check before posting. It can be very useful for catching small typos you missed. :)

[Goldberry344]

Goldie stepped up to the firing line, once again setting an arrow to the string and pulling it back. This time she looked down the arrow for less than a second before she loosed it. It flew straight and true, and landed an inch above her last arrow.

[ILLOTRTM]

"Yes! Excellent! Well done! Swift and sure, very nice job! Now who is next?"

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Goldie- Goldie stepped up to the firing line, once again setting an arrow to the string and pulling it back. This time she looked down the arrow for less than a second before she loosed it. It flew straight and true, and landed an inch above her last arrow.
VERY nice! No mistakes that I could see, good detail, nice work! Great job!

[Legolaschick]

Legolaschick picked up another arrow from her quiver. "I do hope that I get the bulls eye this time," she said out loud. She pulled back and this time she hit the bull’s eye right on. She looked to see if Valanthe had seen and she got a smile.

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How do you get that font

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe did smile indeed. She was very pleased with the progress her students were making. She looked down the row for the next person who would fire.

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Legolaschick- Legolaschick picked up another arrow from her quiver. "I do hope that I get the bulls eye this time," she said out loud. She pulled back and this time she hit the bull’s eye right on. She looked to see if Valanthe had seen and she got a smile.

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How do you get that font
This post was good as well. I see no mistakes, and it sounds pretty good. :) As for your question, which font did you mean? For bold you type in [ B ] (without the spaces of course) at the beginning of what you want to put in bold and at the end you put: [ / B ] For italics, you do the same, only using I instead of B. Thanks for asking! :)

[ms Greenleaf]

Charmiana realizing that they were too intent to answer left and assumed she was not supposed to be there/

[Eöl]

Celebrien stepped up to the line once more. This time, he was determined to hit the bullseye. He concentrated intensely and a bead of sweat dripped down his face. He suddenly let the arrow fly. It landed in the blue, a mere inch from the bullseye! "Whew, this isn't as hard as I thought it would be." he thought.

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe had to grin at Celebrien's happy face as his arrow hit close to the bullseye.

"Very nice shot! Now, Phenix? I beleive you are the only one left who needs to make one more shot. You may fire when ready."

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ms Greenleaf- I've PMed you about your question. I'm sorry it took so long.

Celebrien- Celebrien stepped up to the line once more. This time, he was determined to hit the bullseye. He concentrated intensely and a bead of sweat dripped down his face. He suddenly let the arrow fly. It landed in the blue, a mere inch from the bullseye! "Whew, this isn't as hard as I thought it would be." he thought.
Excellent! Wonderful! Good detail, proofread well, and proper use of dialoge! Great!

I'm very pleased with the progress all of you are making! The things I just mentioned with Celebrien are the things I'm looking for most right now- 1. Proofreading 2. Proper use of dialoge 3. Good detail!
Sometimes a lot of detail can go a long way. Don't be afraid to elaborate on your posts every once in a while.

[Phenix]

"as you which" Phenix said and steped forwards to the line. he grabed a new arow and laid it on the bow. he draged the string backwards to his face but realised it by an axident(sp?) to early and missed the target

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe smiled at all of her students in turn.
"That's alright Phenix, no big deal. Now that everyone has gotten used to this kind of shooting, let's work on moving targets."
Valanthe walked over to the rack of bows and picked a stack of bright red glass disks.
"Let me see how you all are. Here goes the first one, now let's see which one of you hits it!"
Valanthe sent the disk sailing into the air, she watched her students quickley aim there bows and fire. She wondered who would be the first to hit the disk.

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I apologize for my absence as of late, I have been a bit busy.

Phenix- "as you which" Phenix said and steped forwards to the line. he grabed a new arow and laid it on the bow. he draged the string backwards to his face but realised it by an axident(sp?) to early and missed the target
Pretty good. I'm a bit suprised you didn't have your arrow hit like the others, but that can be a good thing. No one hits the target all the time. :)
CORRECTED: "As you wish," Phenix said and stepped forwards to the line. He grabbed a new arrow and laid it on the bow. He dragged the string backwards to his face but released it by accident to early and missed the target.

[Goldberry344]

Swiftly Goldie loaded her bow and in a flash aimed and fired it. Her arrow flew an inch to the right of the disk, missing it narrowly. Raising her eyebrows she thought, This is harder than I expected!

[Legolaschick]

Legolaschick quickly picked up another arrow. "I know I can do this" she thought to herself. She then shot alittle ahead of the disk. But she was just a little bit to far ahead. " oh, well, I'll get it next time."

[lossenandunewen]

Lossenandunewen put down her quiver and bow, and quickly braided her fire red hair and threw it over her shoulder. She picked up her quiver and ivory bow, and placed an arrow onto the shaft. She did her ritual: tongue sticking out a bit, one eye closed and the other squinted. She aimed, and released. Her arrow tore through the air, and hit the target once again in the same place as her first tries.

"Well, perhaps I should just aim a bit above the target. That should work!"

[elfgirl]

A figure in a green cloak walked in, bow in hand. "I hope you don't mind me being late." She said in a beleivable voice. She then picked up an arrow, aimed, and fired. It hit half an inch to the left of the disk. She fired another. It missed by a smaller amount, yet it still missed. "Like I said, sorry for being late!!!"

[Goldberry344]

Goldie straightened her shoulders and drew an arrow from her quiver. In one fluid movement she knocked the arrow and pulled the string to the corner of her eye. Remembering all the hunting trips she had gone on with her Ranger friends, and all the ducks she had killed then, she signaled for the disk to be released, and hit it, an inch to the left of the middle, causing it to break into three pieces.

[elfgirl]

Avari quickly picked up another arrow. The disk was released. The string twanged as the arrow zipped through the air. The shot hit the disk on the left-hand corner. "Mabye I should aim a little farther to the right, next time."

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe held up another disk and looked down the row of her students.

"Haha, not so easy not so hard? Either way, I'll bet this class is not the way you expected it to be. Now, what you need to remember when hitting moving targets is your timing. Timing is the key."

Now Valanthe looked to Avari.

"You shall be excused for your lateness today, but don't let it happen again." she said, a firmness in her voice, but a smile on her face.
She held the disk up and the others prepared to fire. She let it fly and watched the students as they attempted to shatter it.

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elfgirl - A figure in a green cloak walked in, bow in hand. "I hope you don't mind me being late." She said in a beleivable voice. She then picked up an arrow, aimed, and fired. It hit half an inch to the left of the disk. She fired another. It missed by a smaller amount, yet it still missed. "Like I said, sorry for being late!!!"
Well, not bad. One spelling mistake.... I think a few things were a bit out of place, but then again that's my personal opinion. Your entrance was ok. Except.... what exactly did you mean by a "believable" voice? That confused me a touch....
CORRECTED: A figure in a green cloak walked in, bow in hand. "I hope you don't mind me being late." She said in a believable voice. She then picked up an arrow, aimed, and fired. It hit half an inch to the left of the disk. She fired another. It missed by a smaller amount, yet it still missed. "Like I said, sorry for being late!"

Avari quickly picked up another arrow. The disk was released. The string twanged as the arrow zipped through the air. The shot hit the disk on the left-hand corner. "Mabye I should aim a little farther to the right, next time."
Fine. Not much to comment on. Like last time one spelling mistake, but no big deal.
CORRECTED: Avari quickly picked up another arrow. The disk was released. The string twanged as the arrow zipped through the air. The shot hit the disk on the left-hand corner. "Maybe I should aim a little farther to the right, next time."

Goldberry - Swiftly Goldie loaded her bow and in a flash aimed and fired it. Her arrow flew an inch to the right of the disk, missing it narrowly. Raising her eyebrows she thought, This is harder than I expected!
Pretty good. You should have put the thoughts in quotes, though. Nicely done.
CORRECTED: Swiftly Goldie loaded her bow and in a flash aimed and fired it. Her arrow flew an inch to the right of the disk, missing it narrowly. Raising her eyebrows she thought, This is harder than I expected!

Goldie straightened her shoulders and drew an arrow from her quiver. In one fluid movement she knocked the arrow and pulled the string to the corner of her eye. Remembering all the hunting trips she had gone on with her Ranger friends, and all the ducks she had killed then, she signaled for the disk to be released, and hit it, an inch to the left of the middle, causing it to break into three pieces.
Excellent! Nice work! Nothing more to comment on here :)

lossenandunewen -

Lossenandunewen put down her quiver and bow, and quickly braided her fire red hair and threw it over her shoulder. She picked up her quiver and ivory bow, and placed an arrow onto the shaft. She did her ritual: tongue sticking out a bit, one eye closed and the other squinted. She aimed, and released. Her arrow tore through the air, and hit the target once again in the same place as her first tries.

"Well, perhaps I should just aim a bit above the target. That should work!"

Hehe, it's a shame because that was a wonderful post, but we're on to the moving target now. :) Hehe, just pay close attention ;) Great post though.

Legolaschick - Legolaschick quickly picked up another arrow. "I know I can do this" she thought to herself. She then shot alittle ahead of the disk. But she was just a little bit to far ahead. " oh, well, I'll get it next time."

Your post was ok. Still a few mechanics mistakes, but not many.
CORRECTED: Legolaschick quickly picked up another arrow. "I know I can do this" she thought to herself. She then shot a little ahead of the disk, but she was just a little bit too far ahead. "Oh well, I'll get it next time."

[Goldberry344]

Goldie took aim at the disk once again, trying to remember the feel of her last shot, and fired. Her arrow sliced through the edge of the disk, causing it to veer off course. Goldie frowned in frustration, she didn't like to progress backwards.

[lossenandunewen]

Lossenandunewen watched the disc fly with her keen elven eyes. She pulled back the bowstring and placed an arrow into the shaft. With perfect form and grace, she released her arrow. It shot quickly through the air, and hit the disc just a little underneath the target, exactly where she hit the still target.

"Lady, I think we should change the location of the bullseye." She smiled, and tried again.

[elfgirl]

Avari aimed once more at a flying disk, this time getting more towards the center, yet still not breaking the disk. "Oh, well. I'm getting better."

[Phenix]

Phenix took aim on the disc that flew through the air and released the bow. the arow sailed through the air. at first it looked like it was about to hit the disc but suddently, there came a strong wind from nower which got the arow of course and made it fly over the moving disc.

" oh well" Phenix said to him self " beter luck nextime"

[Eöl]

Celebrien stepped up to the line and unshouldered his bow. Another disk was fired and he took aim, still confident from his last shot. He released the arrow and it flew towards the edge of the disk. The arrow hit the edge, chipped off a corner and then the disk fell to the earth. "Oh well, it was still an ok shot at least." he said out loud.

[Legolaschick]

This time when the disk was thrown Legolaschick was ready. She had gotten her arrow and bow ready while the others shot. She quickly pulled back on the string and she let the arrow fly. This time the arrow hit the disk right on. "Yes!" She exclaimed.

[Findarato]

Findarato walked out, took out his bow and arrow, and fired one shot. It hit the disk right in the center, felling it. Avari looked over, and muttered, "showoff".

[lossenandunewen]

Lossenandunewen looked over at Findarato and his felled target.

"I can do that!" She said, and slid an arrow onto the shaft of her bow. She kept one grey eye on the target as it flew up into the air, and she released with all her might. The arrow struck the target and it broke in half. Ewen squealed with joy, and ran over to the broken pieces.

"Hey, wait a minute! No!!" She said, and realized the plate shattered in the exact spot she hit the target every time. She stomped away, a sad yet angry look on her face.

[Goldberry344]

Goldie payed no attention to the newcomer as she knocked an arrow, drew the string to her eye and fired. She did this all so fast she shocked even herself, but when the arrow hit the center of the disk, shattering it, Goldie decided that it was a good approach

[elfgirl]

"You will not outdo me at this sport, Findarato!" Avari said, grudgingly. She picked out a perfect arrow, aimed, and fired. It hit the disk dead on target, and sent it hurling to the ground.

[Findarato]

"I knew that you could do better." He stated it plainly, as if it were a fact, not knowing which to look at: Avari or the target.

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe's eyes dart over to Findarato. She notices his attention drifting a bit from the lesson.
"Come on now, you're late as it is, let's keep your attention on the targets, alright?"
She had to allow a smile to form on her lips as she noted what progress her students were making.
"Great work, all," She said with satisfaction, "Now, we will do this like we did the stationary targets. I will throw one last disk for each of you in turn, and then we will move on to yet another important lesson in archery. Goldie, you're up first."
Valanthe watched her carefully, awaiting her signal to fire.

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I have a new way I will be correcting your posts. I when I put them out as corrected, I will put in bold what I have fixed.

Goldberry - Goldie took aim at the disk once again, trying to remember the feel of her last shot, and fired. Her arrow sliced through the edge of the disk, causing it to veer off course. Goldie frowned in frustration, she didn't like to progress backwards.
Great as usual. :) I really like some of your verbs and adjectives... do you keep a thesaurus near by when posting? ;) (I do!) One simple puncuation mistake, no big deal...
CORRECTED: Goldie took aim at the disk once again, trying to remember the feel of her last shot, and fired. Her arrow sliced through the edge of the disk, causing it to veer off course. Goldie frowned in frustration; she didn't like to progress backwards.

Goldie payed no attention to the newcomer as she knocked an arrow, drew the string to her eye and fired. She did this all so fast she shocked even herself, but when the arrow hit the center of the disk, shattering it, Goldie decided that it was a good approach
hmm, you always seem to have those one or two mistakes that keep them from being perfect. Well, I hate to sound like a nag, but use this one word as CAREFULLy as you can: PROOFREAD. It'll bring your posts up to perfection.
CORRECTED: Goldie paid no attention to the newcomer as she knocked an arrow, drew the string to her eye and fired. She did this all so fast she shocked even herself, but when the arrow hit the center of the disk, shattering it, Goldie decided that it was a good approach.

lossenandunewen - Lossenandunewen watched the disc fly with her keen elven eyes. She pulled back the bowstring and placed an arrow into the shaft. With perfect form and grace, she released her arrow. It shot quickly through the air, and hit the disc just a little underneath the target, exactly where she hit the still target.

"Lady, I think we should change the location of the bullseye." She smiled, and tried again.
Sorry, but I'm afraid I was really confused by your post. Nothing personal, I just didn't understand it. :D What's this about the bullseye? :confused: hehe, just explain it to me a bit better in an OOC, if you please. Other than that, your post was fine. No corrections I need to make.

Lossenandunewen looked over at Findarato and his felled target.

"I can do that!" She said, and slid an arrow onto the shaft of her bow. She kept one grey eye on the target as it flew up into the air, and she released with all her might. The arrow struck the target and it broke in half. Ewen squealed with joy, and ran over to the broken pieces.

"Hey, wait a minute! No!!" She said, and realized the plate shattered in the exact spot she hit the target every time. She stomped away, a sad yet angry look on her face.
Again I am very confused by your talk of the target, but I am pretty sure it's just my mistake. Once again no other corrections.

elfgirl - Avari aimed once more at a flying disk, this time getting more towards the center, yet still not breaking the disk. "Oh, well. I'm getting better."
Fine :)

"You will not outdo me at this sport, Findarato!" Avari said, grudgingly. She picked out a perfect arrow, aimed, and fired. It hit the disk dead on target, and sent it hurling to the ground.
Nice. You didn't need to put a comma after "Avari said" on the first line of your post, but it's fine, you can put it that way if you want to.

Phenix - Phenix took aim on the disc that flew through the air and released the bow. the arow sailed through the air. at first it looked like it was about to hit the disc but suddently, there came a strong wind from nower which got the arow of course and made it fly over the moving disc.

" oh well" Phenix said to him self " beter luck nextime"
Pretty good. I'm seeing an improvement in your spelling as well, keep it up! :)
CORRECTED: Phenix took aim on the disc that flew through the air and released the bow. The arrow sailed through the air. At first it looked like it was about to hit the disc, but suddenly there came a strong wind from no where which got the arrow off course and made it fly over the moving disc.

“Oh well," Phenix said to himself, "Better luck next time."

Celebrien - Celebrien stepped up to the line and unshouldered his bow. Another disk was fired and he took aim, still confident from his last shot. He released the arrow and it flew towards the edge of the disk. The arrow hit the edge, chipped off a corner and then the disk fell to the earth. "Oh well, it was still an ok shot at least." he said out loud.
Fine. However I couldn't find "unshouldered" in the dictionary and spellcheck also said it was wrong... I don't beleive it's a word....
CORRECTED: Celebrien stepped up to the line and took his bow off his shoulder. Another disk was fired and he took aim, still confident from his last shot. He released the arrow and it flew towards the edge of the disk. The arrow hit the edge, chipped off a corner and then the disk fell to the earth. "Oh well, it was still an ok shot at least." he said out loud.

Legolaschick - This time when the disk was thrown Legolaschick was ready. She had gotten her arrow and bow ready while the others shot. She quickly pulled back on the string and she let the arrow fly. This time the arrow hit the disk right on. "Yes!" She exclaimed.
Good. You used the word "she" a lot in this post. I would suggest trying to find a way to avoid that sort of thing in the future. No spelling or anything to correct.

Findarato - Findarato walked out, took out his bow and arrow, and fired one shot. It hit the disk right in the center, felling it. Avari looked over, and muttered, "showoff".
Your entrance was good. Nothing more to say here. :)
CORRECTED: Findarato walked out, took out his bow and arrow, and fired one shot. It hit the disk right in the center, felling it. Avari looked over, and muttered, "Showoff".

"I knew that you could do better." He stated it plainly, as if in fact, not knowing which to look at: Avari or the target.
Hehehehe, methinks I see you flirting. ;) If I'm right, that's fine, but don't let it interfere with class. :D

[Findarato]

OCC:
I was not flirting, merely pointing out that I knew the character could do better, and wasn't giving her full.

[lossenandunewen]

OOC: Since she can't hit the target, she's suggesting they move the center of the target a bit down to where she keeps hitting.. Basically, move the bullseye a bit down and left of a regular target pad because she keeps missing. :)

[ILLOTRTM]

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Findarato - I was just kidding :D

Loss - Thank you for explaining it, I understand now. :D

[Goldberry344]

OOC: I dont think i even own a thesaurus. in case you were really wondering. but i shall proofread...though i doubt id catch any of my mistakes.

IC

Goldie bit her lip as she stepped to the front of her class, drawing an arrow from her quiver as she walked forewards. Rembering her last shot, swift and clean, she knocked the arrow and drew it to her eye in one liquid movement. Valanthe had taken note of each of her students' timing, and threw the disk at the perfect time, allowing a moment for Goldie to aim and fire. Her arrow flew straight, slamming into the center of the disk and continuing into the sky as the disk fell to the ground, shattered into several pieces. Lowering her bow, Goldie stepped away from the firing line and glanced at Valanthe for insight.

[ILLOTRTM]

"Fantastic!" Valanthe exclaimed as the arrow continued off towards its infinite destination until it had no momentum left.
"Your timing was perfect, your movements graceful and your shot strong. Excellent work, my dear! Celebrien, you're next. I await your signal."
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Goldberry - Goldie bit her lip as she stepped to the front of her class, drawing an arrow from her quiver as she walked forewards. Rembering her last shot, swift and clean, she knocked the arrow and drew it to her eye in one liquid movement. Valanthe had taken note of each of her students' timing, and threw the disk at the perfect time, allowing a moment for Goldie to aim and fire. Her arrow flew straight, slamming into the center of the disk and continuing into the sky as the disk fell to the ground, shattered into several pieces. Lowering her bow, Goldie stepped away from the firing line and glanced at Valanthe for insight.
It was wonderful. TWO SPELLING MISTAKES! :( I hate not being able to call it perfect! forewards should have been forwards and rembering should have been remembering. Other than that it was GREAT! :D Nice work anyway :) I know you're trying.

[Eöl]

"Alright then." he said, and stepped up to the line. Celebrien drew an arrow from his quiver, then nocked it to his bow string. He aimed to the sky, then gave the signal. Valanthe launched the disk, and Celebrien fired. The arrow hit the side of the disk, causing both arrow and disk to fall to the earth. "Well, it was a good shot Celebrien, but I think you are releasing to the left a little. Try holding your aim a little bit longer to make sure you hit the target." commented Valanthe.

[Angoreth]

Fair haven walk into the achery field. "Am I late?" she asked as she looked at all the students.

[lossenandunewen]

"Only by a few days!" Lossenandunewen called over.

"We're just doing moving plates, and I'm not sure if anyone hit the target yet. I know I didn't atleast" She smiled warmly.

[Angoreth]

" O.k. thank you" She said as she walked over towards the others."I hope I can use my own bow" She said as she pulled out her silver bow and quiver with mithiril wound around it from under her cloak." I am very good at archery but not as good without my own weapons"She said as she took off her grey cloak.

[Goldberry344]

"I use my own practice bow, Valanthe told us we were welcome to." Goldie said, smiling at the newcomer.

[Angoreth]

Fair haven returned the smile then pulled out an arrow and aimed for a plates." do we just aim for any" she said as she her arrow left the bow.

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe put her hand over her eyes and shook her head.
"Does everyone insist on being late?" She said with false exasperation, "Yes yes! Of course you may use your own equipment.... and it's very nice equipment, by the way." she added, eyeing her silver bow and mithril wound arrows. "Just hold your fire until it is your turn.
"Well, let's not hold the class up. Phenix, you're next to shoot. As with all the others, I await your signal."
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Eöl - "Alright then." he said, and stepped up to the line. Celebrien drew an arrow from his quiver, then nocked it to his bow string. He aimed to the sky, then gave the signal. Valanthe launched the disk, and Celebrien fired. The arrow hit the side of the disk, causing both arrow and disk to fall to the earth. "Well, it was a good shot Celebrien, but I think you are releasing to the left a little. Try holding your aim a little bit longer to make sure you hit the target." commented Valanthe.
Good, fine. Not a lot to comment on...
CORRECTED: "Alright then." he said, and stepped up to the line. Celebrien drew an arrow from his quiver and knocked it to his bow string. He aimed to the sky and gave the signal. Valanthe launched the disk, and Celebrien fired. The arrow hit the side of the disk, causing both arrow and disk to fall to the earth. "Well, it was a good shot, Celebrien, but I think you are releasing to the left a little. Try holding your aim a little bit longer to make sure you hit the target." commented Valanthe.

Angoreth - (I'm not bothering to comment on your first or last post because they're short and there isn't much to comment on.)
" O.k. thank you" she said as she walked over towards the others."I hope I can usse my own bow" she said as she pulled out her silver bow and quiver with mithiril wound around it from with under her cloak." I am very good at archery but not as good without my own weapons"she said as she took off her grey cloak.
umm... ok, this is fine, but try to proofread your posts a bit more before submiting them, I think you could do a bit better. The description of your movements and such are very good. Nice start. :)
CORRECTED: "O.k. thank you," she said as she walked over towards the others. "I hope I can use my own bow," she said as she pulled out her silver bow and quiver with mithiril wound around it from (No with here)under her cloak, "I am very good at archery but not as good without my own weapons," she said as she took off her grey cloak.

I won't bother to comment on any of the other posts here because they are all very short and just idle welcomes.

[Phenix]

"al right" Phenix said and steped over to the line. he drew an arrown and laid it on the bow, then he gave the signal and the disc was in the air. Phenix let it fly through the air for a couple of seconds wile he took aim. he then released it. the arow flew through the air and hit the disc in the uper left corner ( I know it's rund but I didn't know what els to say)

" Alayambo!" Phenix shouted as the disc aswell as the arrow fell to the ground.

[Angoreth]

"Thank you Valanthe,and sorry I am late, I didn't know when classes started." She said as she got a bad feeling this was not a good way to start her first class.She pulled out an arrow getting ready for her shot." I hope I atleast hit the target" She thought to herself. She pulled out an arrow from her quizer and held it between two fingers. She tried not to sweat as she waited for her turn.

[ILLOTRTM]

"Good. Not bad. Next time, Phenix, try perhaps to wait a seciond or two long next time. Legolaschick, it your turn to fire."
Valanthe held the disk and waited.
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Phenix - "al right" Phenix said and steped over to the line. he drew an arrown and laid it on the bow, then he gave the signal and the disc was in the air. Phenix let it fly through the air for a couple of seconds wile he took aim. he then released it. the arow flew through the air and hit the disc in the uper left corner ( I know it's rund but I didn't know what els to say)

" Alayambo!" Phenix shouted as the disc aswell as the arrow fell to the ground.
Fine. Corner was fine, a lot of other people used the word corner too, so from now on, round things have corners ;) By the way, "Alayambo", what's this?
CORRECTED: "All right," Phenix said, and stepped over to the line. He drew an arrow and laid it on the bow, then he gave the signal and the disc was in the air. Phenix let it fly through the air for a couple of seconds while he took aim. He then released it. The arrow flew through the air and hit the disc in the upper left corner.

"Alayambo!" Phenix shouted as the disc as well as the arrow fell to the ground.

Angoreth - "Thank you Valanthe,and sorry I am late, I didn't know when classes started." She said as she got a bad feeling this was not a good way to start her first class.She pulled out an arrow getting ready for her shot.* I hope I atleast hit the target* She thought to herself. She pulled out an arrow from her quizer and held it between two fingers. She tried not to sweat as she waited for her turn.

This is pretty good, however when you put something in a thought, don't put it in stars, put it in italics.
CORRECTED: "Thank you, Valanthe, and sorry I am late, I didn't know when classes started." She said as she got a bad feeling this was not a good way to start her first class. She pulled out an arrow getting ready for her shot. "I hope I at least hit the target," She thought to herself. She pulled out an arrow from her quiver and held it between two fingers. She tried not to sweat as she waited for her turn.

[Legolaschick]

Legolaschick stepped up to the line. Getting her arrow ready she gave the signal to Valanthe. Pulling back right as the disk was thrown, she let her arrow fly. It hit the disk right on. "Yes, I knew I could do it!" She exclaimed.

[Phenix]

(( Alayambo is horray in quenya:D))

[ILLOTRTM]

"Yes! Excellent! Nicely done. Now, Lossenandunewen, you're next."
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Legolaschick - Legolaschick stepped up to the line. Getting her arrow ready she gave the signal to Valanthe. Pulling back right as the disk was thrown, she let her arrow fly. It hit the disk right on. "Yes, I knew I could do it!" She exclaimed.
Great! I don't see any mistakes! VERY nice! Kudos!

Phenix - Thanks. I knew it was Quenya, but I'm not very good at it yet, so.... :D

[lossenandunewen]

Lossenandunewen nodded slowly and bit her lip. She stepped up the to line and took out her ivory bow. She placed an arrow into the shaft and pulled the string back. She nodded to Valanthe, and the target flew. She released the string rather quickly and she began to stomp her foot, but she noticed that her haste helped her. Her arrow hit the target right on.

"I did it! I knew if I was careless it would work" She said excitedly.

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe had to chuckle at her student.
"Perhaps it was not that you were careless, but that you were more relaxed. Now, Avari, you're up."
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Loss - Lossenandunewen nodded slowly and bit her lip. She stepped up the to line and took out her ivory bow. She placed an arrow into the shaft and pulled the string back. She nodded to Valanthe, and the target flew. She released the string rather quickly and she began to stomp her foot, but she noticed that her haste helped her. Her arrow hit the target right on.

"I did it! I knew if I was careless it would work" She said excitedly.
Not bad! As always, I love your description of your movements and such. I found ONE LITTLE mistake. You said "stepped up the to line" instead of "up to the line." Other than that, your post was great.

[elfgirl]

Avari notched her arrowed, signaled, aimed, and shot the arrow off. It hit the disk about 2 inches from the center. "Oh, well. Nobody is perfect."

OCC: So sorry I couldn't make it until now. I had a few things to work out on my computer(it went wacky). I still dont have the spelchecker back running.

[HobbitGirl]

Lita the hobbit walked onto the archery field, bouncing with every step as if she had springs attached to the balls of her bare feet. Her smile faded, however, when she noticed just how late she was. She walked up to the instructor, embarrassed. "I apologize for being so late, miss. I signed up for this class rather late. What have I missed so far? I promise I will practice hard to make up for my rude tardiness."

[Angoreth]

"Hello lita"said Fair Hven as she watched the hobbit bounce as she intered.

[ILLOTRTM]

"Yes yes, in you come. We haven't done much, just working on stationary and moving targets."
Valanthe turned to Avari.
"An ok shot, Avari, but a little more concentration is needed. You're doing well. Findarato, it's your turn."
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elfgirl - Avari notched her arrowed, signaled, aimed, and shot the arrow off. It hit the disk about 2 inches from the center. "Oh, well. Nobody is perfect."
Great! No mistakes and a nice post. It's not good to hit dead on all the time. :)

HobbitGirl - Lita the hobbit walked onto the archery field, bouncing with every step as if she had springs attached to the balls of her bare feet. Her smile faded, however, when she noticed just how late she was. She walked up to the instructor, embarrassed. "I apologize for being so late, miss. I signed up for this class rather late. What have I missed so far? I promise I will practice hard to make up for my rude tardiness."
:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D BEAUTIFUL! I'm VERY pleased with this post! No mechanics problems, EXCELLENT descriptions.... PERFECT. THIS is a perfect post. Lita the hobbit walked onto the archery field, bouncing with every step as if she had springs attached to the balls of her bare feet. Her smile faded, however, when she noticed just how late she was. She walked up to the instructor, embarrassed. This was especially great. Wonderful!

Angoreth - I won't bother to grade it, it's just short and easy :)

[elfgirl]

OCC: I do not think that you will see Findarato around here anymore. You might as well continue without him. I do not know if he has un-joined, if you can, but he has in his own way. He is gone and he shall not return.

[ILLOTRTM]

"Well, it appears that it is Fair Haven's turn."
Valanthe said nothing, knowing that she knew exactly what to do when she was ready.

[Angoreth]

Fair Haven almost fainted when she heard her name. She closed her eye's tightly then opened them, she walked up to the shooting line and planted her feet firmly,she removed an arrow and placed it in her quiver. She waited for the target to fly into the air, Her heart beat as it came into view, she pulled her arrow tight with the string and with that it flew a grat distance hitting the egde of the disc. Quite disapointed in her bad shot she went to the back of the line and tried to think of what she did wrong.

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe could see that her student was discouraged.
"Hmmm.... next time just relax a little more and loosen up. Lita, your turn, you know what to do."
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Angoreth: Fair Haven almost fainted when she heard her name. She closed her eye's tightly then opened them, she walked up to the shooting line and planted her feet firmly,she removed an arrow and placed it in her quiver. She waited for the target to fly into the air, Her heart beat as it came into view, she pulled her arrow tight with the string and with that it flew a grat distance hitting the egde of the disc. Quite disapointed in her bad shot she went to the back of the line and tried to think of what she did wrong.
Very nice. Two little mistakes with mechanics, but I think they're something you can fix on your own next time around. :) I must say, I like your style of writing.

[HobbitGirl]

Lita stepped up to the spot where she was to shoot, her heart pounding and her bow ready. She nocked an arrow to the string, swallowed hard, and drew the arrow back. I hope I don't bungle this, she thought. A bead of sweat dripped down her face. Relax, Lita, the hobbit told herself. It's only one shot. No one will hate you if you fluke. Suddenly Valanthe threw the disk, snapping Lita out of her thoughts. Instantly Lita reacted, sending her shaft flying through the air. The arrow nicked the side of the disk, causing it to flop through the air like a wet sponge and crash into the grass with one edge sticking straight up. Lita lowered her bow and her head, feeling her cheeks flush with embarassment.

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe frowned. She hated to see that her student was so upset by the shot.
"Lita, your shot was fine. Listen all of you, your shots are not as bad as you may think. Some people could not even hit the target at all! You are all quite good at what you do, what you all need is some confidence."
She made eye contact with each student as she said this.
"Now follow me. We have yet another skill to learn."
Valanthe picked up some targets and led her students a very long ways back into the seemingly endless field. They came to yet another firing line.
Valanthe pointed to the opposite side of the line.
"If all of you would take a spot behind here....."
With this, she started back the way they came. When she was about 75 yards away, she laid the targets down, face up. She returned to where her students were standing.
"Now, the trick to this form of firing is your position."
Valanthe put and arrow to her bow and pulled back. She aimed it upwards and fired. The arrow went upwards a ways before falling back down above one of the targets and landing just outside the bulls-eye.
"Alright, Now I'll let you all try this out for a few minutes."

[ILLOTRTM]

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HobbitGirl - Lita stepped up to the spot where she was to shoot, her heart pounding and her bow ready. She nocked an arrow to the string, swallowed hard, and drew the arrow back. I hope I don't bungle this, she thought. A bead of sweat dripped down her face. Relax, Lita, the hobbit told herself. It's only one shot. No one will hate you if you fluke. Suddenly Valanthe threw the disk, snapping Lita out of her thoughts. Instantly Lita reacted, sending her shaft flying through the air. The arrow nicked the side of the disk, causing it to flop through the air like a wet sponge and crash into the grass with one edge sticking straight up. Lita lowered her bow and her head, feeling her cheeks flush with embarassment.
I love it! :D I think you may have a knack for this sort of thing..... :D:D:D:D:D

[lossenandunewen]

Ewen looked a bit challenged. She looked at Valanthe while slowly taking a bow out of her quiver. She stepped up to the line, and her grey eyes scanned the fields and sky looking for the perfect pathway to the bullseye. She aimed upwards, and bit her lip. She looked a bit scared of the outcome, but she continued to pull the string back, and place the arrow inside. She shot upwards with a tiny yelp, and her arrow flew high into the blue sky. She watched it turn, and begin to return to earth, only she seemed to angle the shot straight into the air. The arrow plumeted back to where it started.

"Duck and cover!" Ewen cried, and dropped to the ground covering her head. The arrow hit the ground right in front of her foot, and stuck straight out. She breathed harshly.

"Lady Valanthe, I think I could use some help." She stammered quietly, still a bit shocked from her shot. Her eyes never left the arrow.

[ILLOTRTM]

Grabbing her bow, Valanthe took Ewen aside for a moment.
"Now what did I say earlier? All you have to do is loosen up. Relax. Don't sweat this so much. Now, your problem was that you aimed too far up. You want to aim at the best angle between straight forward and straight up you can. Now, watch me, then try again."
Valanthe took her bow and placed and arrow to the string. She slowly aimed her bow and drew back the string. She glanced at the targets once more, then let go. The arrow hit just above the center of the target.
"Alright, now try again."
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OOC: Now that you are all getting used to the basics and are doing a lot better, I'm only going to put things into OOC if I have something to say. This is a good thing, it means you're all improving. :D

[HobbitGirl]

Seeing that it was perfectly alright if she did horribly, Lita lifted her head, and slowly a smile spread across her face. In an insant she was her normal, hyperactive self again. "Lady Valanthe, if you do not mind, I'll shoot next," the hobbit said. She pulled an arrow out of her quiver, fitted it to the string, and drew back. With one eye closed and her tounge sticking out slightly from concentration, Lita moved her bow up and down, trying to get a feel for what angle she should shoot at. After a few seconds the hobbit stood completetly still, and with a twang her arrow was in the air. She lowered her bow to watch the shaft fly. It arched upwards, but the pull of gravity won over it, pulling it down towards the earth and causing it to bury it's head in the soil three feet above the target. Lita grinned broadly. "I got near the target! Hooray!" she said, dancing in a little circle.

[Legolaschick]

Legolaschick picked up an arrow and got ready to fire. I'm glad that I practiced this before I left home. she thought to herself. She pulled back on the string aiming skyward and let the arrow fly. It flew strait and true, it hit the target right in side of the Bulls eye.

[ElvishHellion]

Lorien ran across the field , pulling on her boots. As she ran ,she fumbled her bow and arrows. When she reached where the rest of the class was standing, her pale face flushed crimson in embrassment . She looked at the ground and mumbled "Sorry I'm Late M'lady"

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe nodded. "It's alright. Get right to practice." She now turned back to Ewen as she waited for her next shot.

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ElvishHellion - Alright, nice entrance, but don't put normal dialoge in italics.

HobbitGirl- Great great work. :D How long have you been role playing? I happen to think you're quite good.... I did forget to mention before, though, put thoughts in italics AND quotations.

Great work guys, keep it up!

[ElvishHellion]

She looks rather relieved and gets in line after the last person, waiting for her turn to shot, hoping not to make a fool of herself-again

[HobbitGirl]

After taking her shot and going to the back of the line, Lita noticed the new person and saw how nervous she was. "It's ok," the hobbit said to her, "I was nervous at first too. But if you just tell yourself that no one will hate you if you do terribly, you'll do fine." Lorien gave Lita a blank look. Lita's smile faltered for a moment, but she grinned again and said with a courtsey, "Lita Shinahn Brandybuck is the name, and it is a pleasure to meet you. What does everyone call you?" Lita asked.

OOC: :D Thank you, ILLOTRTM. I haven't been role playing very long compared to some other people on the forum, (heck I've only been here less than a year) but I've been writing since I knew how. :)

[ElvishHellion]

"I'm Lorien" she whispers ,trying not to be overheard. "i'm glad to meet you and finally make a new friend"

[Angoreth]

Fair haven waited and tryed to estimate how hard to pull the string, unable to tell and feeling as if she looked stupid for standing there so long she put an arrow in her quiver and pulled the string tight to her side. She tryed to keep the arrow in line with the bulls eye and trying not to aim to high, she let fly her arrow. Fair haven waited what seemed like forever, her back was begining to sweat, then finally the arrow pierced through the cloud and hit the bulls eye on the outer rim.Fair haven shouted in exitment,she did not think she would even hit the target. but when it did what a feeling of accomplishment she felt. Fair haven walked to the back of the line and waited for her next try, a little more high spirit then before."Hello lorien"she said with a smile as she walked by.

[Scatha]

Farathorn calmly walked up to Fair Haven, whom he had met when he first arrived here. He placed his hand on her shoulder and pointed at her bow. "Quite an achievement, Fair, but you should try to aim as quickly as possible, instead of keeping the string pulled back for such a long time. This will only cause your hand and arm to start trembling, thus risk the chance of missing your target."

He grinned and pulled away his hand, then headed towards Lady Valanthe. He stopped a few feet before her and made a short bow. "Quel re, Mylady. I am Farathorn and traveled a long way to attend the academy. I hope you do not mind the advice I gave my fellow student?"

[lossenandunewen]

Ewen trembled a bit, and walked back to the line. She gave a scared look to Valanthe, but slowly pulled out her arrow. She put the arrow onto the bow and pulled the string tightly. Her grey eyes searched the sky, and darted from Valanthe to the target. She aimed upwards, but on more of an angle then last time. She let loose a tiny cry and shot her arrow. It flew through the air, and finally landed three feet away from her. She looked relieved, and stepped back from the line in the grass.

"Atleast I didn't wound anything" She said nervously. She was still afraid of this target.

[ElvishHellion]

Lorien stepped up for her turn.She put her foot up to the mark and aimed the best she could . She could hear the other students'
breathing behind her. She shot her arrow and completely missed the bullseye .She hung her head in shame as she walked silently to the back of the line

[Eöl]

Well, I guess I should go next. Celebrien thought as he stepped up to the line. He drew an arrow from his quiver and readied himself. Let's see...if the wind is blowing west...ok I'm ready! He aimed upwards at a slight angle to the east and let fly. The arrow landed on the blue outermost edge of the target. Celebrien calmly replaced his bow on his back and walked back to the group with a smile on his face.

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe smiled at Ewen.
"It's ok, you just need more practice." Now she turned to Farathorn. "Yes of course, your advice is quite welcome. Feel free."
She looked now back at the group of students who were timidly practicing and watched them.

[Legolaschick]

"Ah, I will go next," Legolaschick, said. After putting her arrow on the string of her bow, she aimed up hoping that she would get the target. The arrow flew strait and true this time just outside of the bull’s eye. Walking back to the line she then noticed the new girl. "Why hello, I'm Legolaschick, what is your name?" She said with a smile on her face.

[CelebrianTiwele]

Celebrian spotted the other students shooting aways off. She quickly caught up with them. "Forgive my tardiness," she said calmly. "It is my first day here. I am pretty good with a bow, but I can always learn more." She looked about at her fellow students expressionessly. Spotting someone who also seemed to have just walked up, she said, "Suilad. Is this also your first day?"

[Angoreth]

"Hello Farathorn"said Fair Haven she examend her string."and hello celebrian"she said as the new student walked by.

[CelebrianTiwele]

Celebrian answered Fair Haven's hello with a nod. Then she directed her attention to the teacher. "If I may step in, may I go next." She took out her bow made by Fair Haven's hands and without waiting for an answer, strung it. She plucked the string, and it gave a musical twang. Taking an arrow from her quiver, she pulled the string back to her ear. Without hesitation, she let it fly. It hit the target just above the bull's eye. "Well, a little rusty I'm afraid. But hopefully I can accomplish the skill well known to my people." She stepped away from the line. Spotting Lorien, she stepped in beside her and spoke to her. "I have to work on that."

[Scatha]

Farathorn smiled to the teacher and took a stance between Celebrian and Fair Haven, before he grabbed the bow from his back. He measured the distance to the target, then accounted for the wind, which blew slightly from the side. While he kept the variables in mind, he placed an arrow on the bow, pulled back the string and took aim. As he released the arrow, he swiftly placed a second on the bow and pulled back the string once again, sending the second arrow after the first one, that just landed outside the bullseye. Moments later, the second arrow landed just within the bullseye, a mere inch besides the first.

With a slight grin he placed the bow on his back again, then gave a sheepish smile towards the ladies. "Not exactly what I had in mind, but it will do for now."

[ElvishHellion]

Lorien smiled at Farathorn for a moment before talking to him" At least you hit the bullseye I didn't even come close"

[CelebrianTiwele]

"You are a good archer," Celebrian said. It annoyed her that he had made a better shot than her. She knew she would have to work on her pride. There were so many more intelligent, strong, and talented people here than there were in Lothlorien. She felt a twinge of pain as she thought of her late husband, Lolindir. "He would have enjoyed this," she thought, "He loved archery." She fingered her bow as the memories flooded back.

[Scatha]

Farathorn placed his hand on Celebrian's shoulder and smiled at her. "I don't know whether I could call myself a good archer, but perhaps I have just had more experience. You are certainly not bad yourself and with the use of your bow, you will gain this experience yourself."

He slowly removed his hand again and handed her another arrow.
"Perhaps we could train together some more in future?" The half-elf arched one of his brows a bit, while he awaited her reply.

[CelebrianTiwele]

She smiled at Farathorn, "I would enjoy that very much. I used to be very good at archery, but I lived under the protection of other elves for so long..." her voice faded then grew strong again, "But yes, I would quite enjoy training with you." She felt better. At least he was being gracious and not gloating or anything. She was touched by his kind offer. She took the arrow. "Watch me shoot. Then tell me what I'm doing wrong," she said. Celebrian strung the bow and pulled the arrow to her ear. She quickly judged the distance and shot. It hit just outside the bull's eye again. She turned to Farathorn.

[Scatha]

Farathorn nodded and commented on the shot.
"Nicely done, but there's one small flaw in your stance. You should pull the string to your cheek, to align your eye with the arrow, not pull the string as far as your ear. This way you have a better view and a more precise aim."

He took his bow off his back once again and slowly showed her the move he had just explained. "By aligning your eye with the arrow, you should hit what you aim at, unless it is a moving target. In case of a moving target, you account for its speed of movement, then aim the expected rate in front of the target."

[Angoreth]

"smart isent he"she sid sarcasticly but jokingly with a smile.

[CelebrianTiwele]

Celebrian Tiwele smiled at Fair Haven. "Oh, I see." she said to Farathorn. She mirrored his move. She drew the string back to her cheek, checked the distance and let the arrow fly. It hit right in the middle of the bull's eye. She winked at Farathorn. "Well, its my lucky day. Now I just have to learn how to hit a moving target. Most orcs don't stand still." She pulled the string to her cheek again. This time it splintered the other arrow. She smiled.

[ElvishHellion]

Lorien stpped up again , hoping that she wouldn't make herself look like a fool . She pulled back her bow and aimed carefully. SHe let the arrow fly. but again she mist . With an air of despair she return to her place without lookign back.

[HobbitGirl]

Lita noticed how forlorn Lorien was as the elf took her place in line. "Please don't be sad," the hobbit said. "It's only archery, after all. You look like someone just died. Really, my friend, no one cares if you do badly. We're all here to learn."

[CelebrianTiwele]

Celebrian looked at Lorien. She took her by the hand, "Don't be upset Lorien. Remember, every elf that ever shot a bow had to learn at one time. All the great elven warriors like Gil-galad." Don't be frustrated, just relax."

[ElvishHellion]

"i'm so futrated(sp?) she said "everybody is so good i wish some people would help me" she said glaring at Farathorn

[Legolaschick]

"I shall help you, Lorien, that is if you wish it." Said Legolaschick with a smile.

[Scatha]

Farathorn walked towards Lorien and took a stance behind her.
"Draw your bow once again and I will correct your stance. By watching you closely, I should be able to tell you what mistake you made."

He grinned at her and placed a hand on her shoulder.
"Is that ok?"

[ElvishHellion]

She looked at him with a shocked expression but then blushed. She dreww her bow and sent her arrow flying . It landed beyond the bullseye. SHe turned around and looked at Farathorn

[Legolaschick]

"Ok, fine." Legolaschick said. Walking up to the line she put the arrow onto the string she pulled back and shot this time hitting on the very edge of the bulls eye. "I'll get it next time." she said. Walking back to the others, she walked over to Farathorn "How long have you been shooting? You are very good." she said with a shy smile.

[Angoreth]

Sence no one else was stepping up to th line, because they were all hovering around Farathorn, she thought she might as well go while no was looking. She felt a little at ease cuz she felt no one was watching,she pulled out an arrow and placed it into her quiver, she waited a few minutes for the wind to stop blowing and then waited for the right impulse. She pulled back on the string and aimed up trying to keep in line with the bulls eye once again, she thought to her self" A Elbereth Githoniel "she felt a comfert come over her, the wind began to blow again but she did not wait she released her arrow, it glided through the sky as a boat on water.the wind blew harder but her arrow did not faltur, in doing so it came down onto the bulls eye hitting the outer rim*sigh* "well it is closer" she though to herself.

[CelebrianTiwele]

Celebrian looked up in time to see Fair Haven's arrow land. She came away from what was becoming a Farathorn fan club. "Good job," she said. She was anxious to shoot at a moving target, but thought she might as well practice. She put an arrow on the string quickly pulled it back to her cheek. She calculated the wind direction and distance, and the arrow flew. She quickly sent two more after it, splintering the one before it. She said nothing as she stepped back from the line. "I'm getting much better at this," she thought.

[Angoreth]

" I fear I will be in this lesson for quite a long time" fair haven thought to herself as she hung her head"nice shot cel" she said as she back away from the line and sat on the ground byherself.

[legolasismine]

Walks in during the lessons"Sorrry if I'm late"she says taking a seat and laying her bow and arrows on the ground beside me.

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe checks her watch and looks at her students.
"Thank you, everyone. Since all we have been doing so far getting used to this form of archery, I think now would be a good time to end today's lesson. I will see you all on Monday. Have a nice weekend!"
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OOC:
Alright, you guys are doing GREAT! Well, we now have this new timeline beginning on the 17th. I'll admit I'm a bit confused by it, but I'll do my best. Have a nice HI weekend. See you all in class on "Monday"

[Angoreth]

"Good bye ya'll"said Fair haven as she gt up to leav.

[ElvishHellion]

lorien exits and head towrd the dorm , looking at Farathorn

[CelebrianTiwele]

Celebrian gathered up her bow and arrows and turned to go. She slowly walked back to the dorms, taking one look back at the rest of the students.

[HobbitGirl]

With a glance at Valanthe, Lita set her bow and quiver on the ground by the line, for they were borrowed. The hobbit straightened up, smiled at the students and the instructor, and turned to leave. She noticed all of the female elves staring at Farathorn and wondered how he would like having his own fan club. Lita shrugged her shoulders, telling herself it wasn't her business, and walked off the field towards the dorms.

[ElvishHellion]

"hey lita wait up " yelled Lorien , getting bored walking by herself . She looked back at farathorn who was helplessly surrounded by girls. He looked a mixture of suprised and scared

[Legolaschick]

See the others leaveing Legolaschick cryed, "Hey, please wait for me!" Catching up with the other girls. "Want to do anything?"

[ElvishHellion]

occ maybe we shoudl continue this in the dorms thread!

[Legolaschick]

"ok, let us head to the dorms!" cryed Legolaschick.

[Scatha]

Farathorn placed his bow on his back once again, then took a bow to Lady Valanthe. "A good weekend to you as well. May the grass beneath thy feet remain green, until next we meet."

He rose again and headed towards the dorms, while he pondered what to do with all this female attention.

[Angoreth]

Fair haven yelled back to Valanthe"Am I aloud to ask any one for help on my archery"she said as she hoped she could ask lita to practice with her.

[Legolaschick]

Legolaschick walked back into the area. "Hello, I do hope that I'm not late. I think that I will practice my archery somemore." she said, and with that she went up to the line and started shooting agian.

[Goldberry344]

Goldie walked into the arena, smiling timidly as she strung her bow. Her hands trembled as she slipped the upper loop over the tip of the bow, and the string slipped from her grip. Sniffing back tears of frustration and hurt, she tried again, stringing the bow this time. She drew an arrow and knocked it, and wiping away a stray tear, she scoweled at the target, drew the string to her eye and, fast as lighting, released it. The arrow flew straight and true to the center of the bulls eye. "There!" She thought, "I may miss him, but i can still live without him here, and i can still shoot my bow. He'll come back."

[legolasismine]

Adlyn walked into the arena again hopring not to be late,takes a seat.

[Legolaschick]

Seeing the tears L.C. walking over to Goldie she said, "Goldie, is there anything that I may help you with? I do not mean to stick my nose into your stuff but if you ever need an ear to lesson to you I'm here, and my door is always open, no madder what time it is." and with that L.C. went back to her practicing.

[Goldberry344]

Goldie smiled, touched by Lagolaschick's offer. Goldie wipe her tears away, drew another arrow, planted her feet firmly at shoulder length, knocked the arrow, drew the string and fired. The arrow struck the bulls eye, in the top left section.

[Scatha]

OOC:

LC, a piece of friendly advice, what you do with it for now, is up to yourself. I had to re-read your post twice, to see what exactly you meant. You spelled listen as lesson, and matter as madder. Might I suggest you use the spellcheck, to lessen the confusion on the rest of the players? :)

[ElvishHellion]

Lorien walked into the class hoping for her friends to be present. SHe smiled at Farathorn , hoping he would help her today . she also hoped she got better at non- moving archery because she'd praticed all weekend

[Angoreth]

Fair haven walked in to the arena"not again "she thought to herself"I hate being last "she thought as she tried to put on a smile to hide her embaresment."hello"she said to the other students as she reached the end of the line"I must wake up more early "she thought to herself. she sighed as she waited for her turn.

[ElvishHellion]

"hello Fair Haven sleep well?" said Lorien teasingly. Lorien grimaced as she looked beyond Fair Havne's face to what layed behind her where students were coming. SHe searched the faces for the person she was looking for but alas he was not there

[Legolaschick]

"I shall go next," L.C. said with a smile. Going up to the line she put an arrow onto the string pulling back to her cheek she let go of the string, the arrow then flew strait and then it misses the bull’s eye by a little more than an inch. Oh, well, I will get it next time." she said to herself.

OOC:
I'm so sorry about that I will spell check it better.

[elfgirl]

Avari walked into the class, hoping that she wasn't late, and fired off an arrow, which hit in the second rung of the target. she smiled and walked away from the line.

[Angoreth]

Fair haven blushed"oh well, yes I slept fine thank you."she said as she walked up to the line, still blushing becaus some one had noticed she was late. Fair haven tried calming down but her heart was racing, she drew a deep breath and pulled out an arrow and placed it in her mithril wound quiver.She pulled back on the string and placed her feet firmly in the dirt. The rising sun was hot on her back, she aimed her arrow then let it fly. She hated the suspence of not knowing if she will hit the target or lok like a complet fol infront of all the other students. FInally the arrow peirced through the cluds and hit the outer rim of the center of the bulls eye.She raised her quiver in the air as a sign of her success, then quickly put it down for fear of looking stupid. She walked to the back of the line trying not to burst out with joy.

[ElvishHellion]

lorien wlaked up for her turn and aimed carefully . she hit the outer rim and jumped up cheering " i have to thank Farathorn for that !" she yelled

[CelebrianTiwele]

Celebrian walked in to the arena. She greeted Lorien and Fair Haven, and stepped up to the line. She pulled her bow back an fired twice at the target, setting the arrow in the bull's eye each time. She stepped back and watched the others.

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OOC: Everyone's here just to practice right? A new class hasn't started? Its still technically Sunday I think.

[Scatha]

OOC: That is correct, Celebrian.

[ILLOTRTM]

OOC:
Just to clarify, everybody, I am back now! I dismissed all of my classes before because I was not sure if I'd be back before the timeline started. I won't bother to start my classes again until their time in the timeline comes. See you all then :D
By the way, Scatha, you're VERY welcome to give tips and advice, I'm glad you've been here to give them while I was gone. I can't wait to see you as a trainer :D

[Scatha]

OOC: Thanks and the pleasure was mine, ILLOTRTM. Good to see you back. :)

[Angoreth]

OOC: yes welcome back,hey cn we make up little names for you, to make it easier to spell your name?

[ILLOTRTM]

OOC: What, you mean for my screen name, ILLOTRTM? Geez, I dunno how many times I've told this to people :rolleyes:
PLEASE Call me Cora, after my Hobbit RP character. I've been trying to get people to call me that for a while. Spread the word! :D Anyway, you are all free to continue to practice here until class starts, if you should like.....

[Legolaschick]

"Welcome back Ms. Cora, I'm glade that you are back." L.C. said with a bow. "Hope that class will go well this week." and with that L.C. went to the line and shot two arrows, both hit the bulls eye right on.

[Scatha]

OOC: LC, the Cora is for use in OOC only, not IC. ;)
In character the name is Lady Valanthe.

[ElvishHellion]

Lorien walked over to where lC was standing. She drew her bow and fired , hitting a ring. SHe smiled lightly the frowned , hoping somone whould help her get better

[Legolaschick]

OOC: I'm soo sorry

IC:
Looking at Lorien L.C. smiled,"Would you like my help? I'm always up to help others, for then I help myself." she said with a small smile. And with that she went up to the line and after lining up her shot she pulled back and let her arrow fly. It hit the out side of the bulls eye. I had hoped for a better shot. she thought to herself.

[Angoreth]

OOC: i was meaning a name shorter then her name right now, can we call you cora in IC: or is scatha right once again, and what does ILLOTRTM mean I am guessing te letters mean something?

IC: fair haven wondered why she took so long to hit the target and every one else just walked up and hit it dead center."*sigh* I fear I am a bad archer."she thought to herself as she was still in the back of the line.

[Goldberry344]

OOC: I Love LOTR The Movie, i think. and LC, that color is really hard for me to read, could you use a different shade of red, maybe?

IC
Goldie got tired of practice, she wanted to learn. She sat down on a bench and watched her piers pracice, smiling as they worked.

[ILLOTRTM]

OOC: FYI It stands for I Love Lord Of The Rings Too Much hehe. s for Valanthe, you can call her Lady Val if you like. Cora is just for OOC.

IC:
Valanthe walked across the grass of the field at 3:50 P.M. Seeing there were already some students there, she smiled and took up her bow. She fired at the targets on the ground. Her arrow peirced above the center.
"Ha, can't win them all." She said with a shrug.
"Well, for right now I'd like you all to make a shot at the target, in no particular order and let me know if there is anything specific I can help you with. Once you've all fired we'll move on."

[Luthien_7]

Elleth slowly walked into the field. She smiled slightly and greeted Lorien. The students were practicing so she picked up her bow and took an arrow from her quiver. She pulled back the string to her ear and aimed carefully. Her hand trembled a little when she let it fly. It hit the outer rim of the target.
"It seems that i won't ever be able to hit it in the bull's eye..." she said in a low voice to herself.

[ElvishHellion]

Lorien smiled at Elleth. She hoped that Farathorn would be here to help her today. SHe'd improved greatly since their last class but only enought to hit the bull's eye ,no where close to the middle though

[Goldberry344]

Goldie stepped upto the line to take her shot. She drew an arrow slowly from her quiver, glancing at the rest of the class. Swiftly she knocked the arrow and pulled the string to her eye, all in one motion. Pausing for a split second to aim, Goldie released the bowstring. Her arrow swiftly cut through the air, coming to an abrupt halt in the lower right hand corner of the bullseye. Smiling with satisfaction, Goldie lowered her bow and stepped back from the firing line.

[Legolaschick]

Walking up to the line L.C. took her shot, this time she had hit the bulls eye right on. Yes! I did it!" she thought to herself.

[Scatha]

Farathorn calmly walked towards the archery field, his bow and quiver on his back. Once within reach of the teacher, he bowed towards her. "Good afternoon, Milady. Mind if I gave you some assistance today?"

The half-elf rose and looked at the instructor with a grin on his face, whilst he added a brief comment. "After all, you seem to have the busiest class in the entire academy. I hope my classes will not be this crowded."

[Luthien_7]

Elleth saw L.C.'s skillful shot and smiled at her. "I wish i could fire arrows so good as she." She sighed and stepped up to the line. She lifted up her bow and pulled back the string. Then she let the arrow fly. Now it hit a little closer than before. A slight smile appeared in her face.

[ElvishHellion]

Lorien smiled to see Farathorn again since it had been awhile since she had. Thinking back.. the last time she'd seen him was when she'd bumped into him in the dorms . SHe blushed at the very thought

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe courtsied politely to Farathorn.
"Yes, I would be most grateful if you would offer some of your knowledge to the other students. Thank you."
She smiled and turned back to the students who were firing. She noticed Elleth as her arrow got closer and closer to the bulls-eye.
"Elleth, try to steady your hands a bit more, and perhaps aim a bit higher," Valanthe called to her.

[Scatha]

Farathorn nodded to Lady Valanthe and smiled.
"Consider it done, Mylady."

He strolled towards Elleth and watched her every move. In the meantime he rose a finger in the air and smirked.
"The wind comes from the left, so aim a little more towards the left, since the wind will blow your arrow towards the right. By accounting for the wind, your aim will improve."

[Phenix]

Phenix knocked three arrows on his bow, trying too do the same as yesterday, he carfully aimed at the target, hold the bow string back a few second and then realised it. at first al the arrows flew straight against the middle but soon they "turned" and hit teh target in the first and second ring from the middle

" oh well..can't make it every time" he sayed too himselfs before steping aside

[ElvishHellion]

Lorien laughed at little , waiting from her turn. She watched the others and when it was her turn she copied them .She Strung her Arrow and shoit. It barley missed the Bullseye Man i thought i was getting good i guess not she thought glumly

[HobbitGirl]

The time was 3:59 in the afternoon, and from a distance the people on the archery field saw a red glint coming towards them. The glint was the bright red, curly locks of a hobbit who once again approached the archers as if she was going to burst out in a cartwheel any minute for the amount of energy she had. She grinned broadly at Lady Valanthe and Lord Farathorn. She made a bow towards them. "Good afternoon, my Lord, my Lady." She straightened, and her grin widened, though she was smiling so wide that it didn't seem possible. "I'm not late!" the hobbit exclaimed. "It's 3:59! I'm early to class for once!" The professors of Heren Istarion only looked at her, seemingly at a loss for words at her randomness. Lita blushed, knowing that look all too well; getting it from her teachers was humiliating. Meekly Lita picked up one of each of the practice bows and quivers that were laid neatly out on the ground for students to use. She slung the quiver on her back, held her bow in both hands and waited in the line for it to be her turn to shoot.

[Goldberry344]

Goldie smiled at Lita and nuged her foreward to shoot. "Go ahead, no one else is going. You might as well!"

[HobbitGirl]

Lita jumped when she was nudged, but when she spun around and saw Goldie smiling at her the hobbit smiled too. She remembered that it had been Goldie who welcomed her to Heren Istarion. Goldie was the first person who had ever made her feel welcome, for Heren Istarion was the first place she had ever felt welcome. Remembering this made Lita's smile widen, as it had a tendancy to do, and the hobbit stepped forward to shoot.

She pulled an arrow out of the quiver on her back and fitted it to the string. "Blasted targets," she muttered. "So far away, and facing upwards too. Ah well. Maybe I'll hit it this time." As soon as she stopped muttering to herself the hobbit dearly wished no one had heard. People thought she was insane as it was. Trying to shove those thoughts out of her head, Lita pulled the arrow back. She began trying to estimate the angle she should shoot at in her head again, and remembered Farathorn's advice to Elleth about the wind. The hobbit listened as a breeze blew, ruffling her auburn curls ever so slightly. She took the wind into her calculations, pulled the arrow back another milimeter, and let it fly with a twang. It sailed through the air, swifter and truer than Lita thought she was capable of. It sank into the target just centimeters from the bullseye.

Lita was elated. "I hit it! I hit the blasted thing! Yes!" The hobbit dropped her quiver suddenly and turned a cartwheel for sheer joy at her success.

[Eöl]

Celebrien walked onto the field slightly behind Lita, his quiver strapped to his back. He began to warm up before Lady Valanthe arrived. Noticing Lita's look at Goldie, he walked over to the hobbit just to make sure he invited her to the party. "Lita, just checking to make sure you got an invitation to the party for Goldie?" he asked. "Yes, Celebrien, I got one and I can't wait!" After he asked her, Celebrien wandered back to his target.

[Scatha]

Farathorn grinned as he watched Lita, then commented briefly:
"Well done Lita, may the hair on your toes never fall off."

The half-elf smiled at the Hobbit, knowing his response was common among her kin.

OOC: Good posts, Hobbitgirl. :)

Goldie: The post is a little on the short side, I know you can do better. :)

Eol: No comment needed, solid post.

[ElvishHellion]

Lorien smiled intently. Maybe she would ask Lita for a little help later if by chance (there was a very good chance) she didn't improve. SHe leaned ever so slightly againest a tree, waiting for the times to embrass her self again

[Luthien_7]

Elleth stood behind the line again. She took the arrow, pulled back the string of her bow and aimed a little bit to the left of the bull's eye. All attention she turned to the target when suddenly her memory brought her back to one of the sunny days in Rivendell. She was sneaking slowly forward and watched her brother in front of her. He even didn't notice her or pretended that he didn't. That was their favorite game in the childhood. Suddenly she sprung to her feet and cast him down and they rolled down from the low hill and laughed.

She couldn't resist and laughed aloud. She blushed when she saw other's looks. She turned quickly again to the target and let the arrow fly. Now it almost hit in the center. Her gray-green eyes sparkled in joy for she had never hit so near.

[ILLOTRTM]

Valanthe signals for all of her students to ceasefire for a moment.
"Very well done, everybody! You're doing great! Now, I notice that this target is a bit more complex than others. There are a lot of variables you need to take into account in archery. All of them are especially important here. You need to keep in mind your aim, speed, strength, balance and very importantly, the wind. In this form of targeting, you can't isolate your arms completely. Your whole upper body needs to be flexible enough for ou to get into the correct position before firing."
Valanthe took a moment to demenstrate everything she had just said. When she was through, she looked back over to her students.
"Now continue your practice with all of that in mind."
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OOC:
Scatha, I appreciate your help a lot since I don't always have a lot of time to post here.
Listen to Scatha, everyone, he's a better trainer than I am :rolleyes:

[Legolaschick]

Watching Lady Val L.C. was always watching people who were much better then herself. As Lady Val did the movements L.C. copied her. "These will really help me," she thought to herself.

[ElvishHellion]

Lorien watched for another moment before stepping up for her turn. SHe stepped up to the line and felt her body tense from the stress of everybody watching her. no big deal she thought to herselfRemeber what your doing She un-tensed and fired and it finally afetr a split secongd hit the target right in the middle. Oh my god She thought I can't believe i just did that ! SHe smiled conifidently(sp?) atr he class mates and stepped back. SHe finally had something to be proud of

[Scatha]

OOC: You're Welcome, Cora. and thanks for the kind words.

Luthien: Well done, good post. :)

ElvishHellion: Doing much better, watch your spelling a little.
Confidently is the word you were looking for. :)

LC: Rather confusing post. I had to re-read. Something along these lines would have made it easier;
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Watching Lady Val, L.C. was always watching people